Can someone check My paragraph for any errors please?

I live in a typical house as all houses around my block with palm trees by the streets, entrance yard surrounded by a fence and a driveway in front of the garage. My house has two bedrooms, one bath, a large garage, a front yard with a small colorful vivid garden and a driveway. We always try to keep my house clean, dishes are always washed, and trash always taken out and the wood floor is always broomed. However, sometimes there’s dust on furniture, TV, on pictures and portraits. In the garage is where my family stores all our material belongings, such as old furniture, TVs, bicycles and clothes that we don’t like or wear. The living room is ample, it has two leather soft brown sofas, a dinner table, a cabinet with a TV on top, two small tables around the large sofa, portrait of a flower and pictures on top of the middle table and paste on the wall. My room which is my favorite part of the house is always neat and clean and smells like Hawaiian breeze because of an air freshener.

Can someone check My paragraph for any errors please?
I live in a typical house similar to all the houses around my block with palm trees by the streets, entrance yard surrounded by a fence and a driveway in front of the garage. My house has two bedrooms, one bathroom, a large garage, a front yard with a small colorful vivid garden and a driveway. We always try to keep my house clean, dishes are always washed, and trash always taken out and the wood floor is always swept. However, sometimes there’s dust on furniture, TV, on pictures and portraits. The garge is where my family stores all our material belongings, such as old furniture, TVs, bicycles and clothes that we don’t like or wear any longer. The living room is ample, it has two leather soft brown sofas, a dinner table, a cabinet with a TV on top, two small tables around the large sofa, portrait of a flower, pictures on top of the middle table and paste on the wall. My room which is my favorite part of the house is always neat and clean and smells like Hawaiian breeze because of an air freshener.
Reply:paste on the wall





WTF??
Reply:I live in a typical house (much) as all houses around my block (we have) palm trees by the streets, entrance yard surrounded by a fence and a driveway in front of the garage. My house has two bedrooms, one bath, a large garage, a front yard with a small colorful vivid garden and a driveway. We always try to keep my house clean, dishes are always washed, and trash always taken out and the wood floor is always broomed (replace with swept (depending on country)). However, sometimes there’s (change to there is) dust on furniture, TV, on pictures and portraits. In the garage is where my family stores all (*change "all" to unused or extra, since you store your material belongings in your house also) our material belongings, such as old furniture, TVs, bicycles and clothes that we don’t like or wear. The living room is ample, it has two leather soft brown sofas, a dinner table, a cabinet with a TV on top, two small tables [around] (change to beside) the large sofa, (a) portrait of a flower and pictures on top of the middle table and paste(d) on the wall. My room (comma here, or begin parenthesis, end parenthesis after house, if no parenthesis, use comma again after "house") which is my favorite part of the house is always neat and (replace and with comma) clean and smells like Hawaiian breeze because of an air freshener.
Reply:I would suggest fixing your first sentence.


Example: I live in a typical house, as are all houses on my block. There are palm trees by the streets...


Other than that it's fine. I would maybe elaborate on your room since it's your favorite part of the house. Why is it your favorite? Maybe give more of a description.
Reply:No i cannot. Why cant you?
Reply:there are a few comma errors, and the whole paragraph is sort of jumbled. try breaking up a few of the sentences and varying the sentence structure...varying sentence structure is important-it makes the piece more interesting and simpler to follow.



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