How do you like my song?

Firelight





With each new passing day,


I%26#039;m looking for another way.


To save a breath, Avoid the death,


Of monotony.





Come an go in an hour,


The taste is getting sour,


The smell of a poison flower,


That I%26#039;m breathing.





Could this wall be receding?





So let%26#039;s dance around the fire,


Till you go,


My life was getting higher,


Now it%26#039;s low.


And all the while,


The night can%26#039;t stop your smile.





Seems nothing you can say,


Can stop this pain without decay,


All the while I%26#039;m waiting,.


My head%26#039;s in a cloud,


You better yell loud.





So let%26#039;s dance around the fire,


Till you go,


My life was getting higher,


Now it%26#039;s low.


And all the while,


The night can%26#039;t stop your smile.


So let%26#039;s dance around the fire,


Till you go,





Friendship%26#039;s ties keeping me held down,


Frequent lies causing melt down.


Didn%26#039;t have much to live for,


But on that starry night,


Her eyes were burning like firelight,


Never gonna let her outta sight.





So let%26#039;s dance around the fire,


Till you go,


My life was getting higher,


Now it%26#039;s low.


And all the while,


The night can%26#039;t stop your smile.





We%26#039;ll retell the memories,


Watch the wind in the trees,


See the waves move with her heartbeat,


All I%26#039;d want to do is fall asleep,


Deep and to keep.


Right now I ain%26#039;t got no choice,


Her lips are soft and moist.


Flames keeping us warm,


While the world%26#039;s so cold,


A never-ending storm.





Friendship%26#039;s ties keeping me held down,


Frequent lies are causing this melt down .


Didn%26#039;t have much to live for,


But on that starry night,


Her eyes were burning like firelight,


Never gonna let her outta sight.


All we know is that where we are is right.





So let%26#039;s around the fire,


Till you go,


My life was getting higher,


Now it%26#039;s low.


And all the while,


The night can%26#039;t stop your smile.





The orange sky burns like the firelight,


Reflecting in her eyes,


Far out of sight,


All we know,


Is this is right.


As our past fades,


Into the light.

How do you like my song?
I like your rhyming and lyrical flow, but i think there are too many lyrics, It should have like a monstrous instrumental interlude in it where you just jam on, and on and on, tehn get back for teh last 2 verses or so!



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